Sugar Ray Poem
By Ben Harter
Once there was a man named Sugar Ray
And with his money he loved to play
With all the proceeds from his fights
He would party most of his nights
For all his friends who loved to spend
He would always have money to lend
But when the government wanted a cut
Old Sugar Ray was stuck in a rut
All his money he started to lose
So he put back on his boxing shoes
His comeback didn’t go down well
With tickets being a problem to sell
Four million dollars came and went
With most going toward the government
When asked, he would always say:
“I wouldn’t have had it any other way.
I would like for people to give me feedback on what I should do to make my poem better.
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Good Job, on your piece. I really like the rhyming words that you put in your poem. I would you could do make your poem better is add interesting facts about his life, his carrer, other wise its a really good poem.
ReplyDeleteNice job on your poem! :) I think that if you add more important things that happened in his life it would make it more interesting. Other then that its very good!
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